Tuesday, September 6, 2011

Night of Secrecy

Night of Secrecy
           
It’s being days now that I’ve noticed James looking deeply into my eyes, what is this about? Should I ask him?
            “Is there something you might want to ask me? Is something wrong? I’ve noticed a bit of secrecy from you, James,” I asked gingerly. I can derive from his behavior that he is up to something…
            “No sir. There is currently nothing wrong,” he answered boldly and at the same time placed a silver tray clad by a white mantelpiece protecting it from abrasion.
            “I will be at my chamber, goodnight James,” In a cursory manner I stood up from the dining table and made my way back to my chamber.
            As I entered the long and extensive chamber I took a quick inventory of my possessions, I will not succumb to think that James is not up to something, I can frankly surmise that someone has been using my lantern. In need for some fresh air, I once again left my chamber; James was nowhere to be seen. I went out to the balcony and examined my plants, they were all dehydrated and faltering, I guess James has not been doing his work… a drop of rain and the flash of lighting electrified the night, it’s time to sleep.
            Making my way back again to my chamber, my curiousness reached its climax, I stopped walking and walked on to James’s room, it was closed and the door was tight shut and locked. My endeavor to try and hear a single sound or noise coming from his room was successful, I could hear him talking, not talking but more like mumbling words I could not make out. I heard footsteps and scurried back on the way to my chamber- “Sir, is there anything you need?” He said to me. He knew I was trying to eavesdrop, this corroborates that he was there for saying something he did not want for me to hear or be a part of. I did not answer.
            As soon as he went back into his room, I went back into mine and quickly simulated sleep. A few hours into the turbulent night I heard him walking, his steps drew in closer and closer as time went by.  I fell into deep sleep where I dreamed, a gruesome dream which ended when a faint ray of light hit my eye, what is this about?
            It was all seconds from been explained, it all happened in a blink. It was my lantern the one that shined upon me, the one that revealed the grimace upon a man’s face I thought I knew, James… the last face I ever saw.

4 comments:

  1. Nice story, I liked your use of the wordly wise words. I also liked how you made a whole different story of what was happening before that night, and how he new all along that something was wrong. The only thing I found wrong was that I didn't understand the usage of the word corroborate.

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  2. OHMAHGAH. Dad, you did a greeeeat job! I love your ending! Its a whole different point of view then all the others I've read so far! I guess I have a lot to learn! Also I love the italics on the word secrecy! I'm trying to find something I can correct you on but I can't! Hahaha good story daddy!

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  3. OHMAHGAH! Super great story!! I love your point of view! It's completely different from all the other stories ive read so far! I love your ending also! It's like, if you hadn't read the story you'd be left with having to infer your own answer as to what happened! I'm trying to find something to correct you on but I cant! Good job dad!!! <3

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  4. nice ending i like the way you explain the victims suspicion on james. very intiguing way you started the story.

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